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Tuesday 16 June 2015

The Little Dinosaur

We were asked to write a story about the Little Dinosaur, I really enjoyed watching this movie and reading the book. But the most fun part of writing this story, was writing about what happened to the Little Dinosaur.
I am excited to share this work with everyone and I hope people enjoy it and will leave comments to help me improve it.
One day there was a little dinosaur and there was a flood.  The little dinosaur fell into the river and got  pulled in a forest. And he was cold and scared and far from home.  Little dinosaur hurt his leg. He wanted to sleep but he had to watch out for big dinosaur, his worst enemies. But he had to run but he ran very very slow because his leg was sore and  he found a hiding place he hid there and he saw a troop of little dinosaurs. They looked just like little dinosaur, he wanted to meet them. But he was too scared to meet them and the oldest dinosaur stood forward and put her head up and smelt the air. She smelt the big dinosaur and she told the others to run away and the little dinosaur ran too. He ran so slow but the little dinosaurs stopped and ran with little dinosaur and they ran to a safe place and they were safe.by ATI.
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13 comments:

  1. Anonymous23 June 2015 at 11:20

    Hi Ariana I love this story about the little dinosaur but there was a little mistake but and another but did not make sense

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  2. Anonymous23 June 2015 at 11:21

    Hi Ariana I love this story about the little dinosaur but there was a little mistake but and another but did not make sense

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  3. Anonymous26 June 2015 at 09:22

    I like your story! you have some mistakes but other than that Great job. Keep it up!

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  4. Anonymous29 June 2015 at 10:42

    Hi Ariana I like your subject that you chose. What happened after the dinosaur went to a safe place? Did he make new friends? Keep up the good work.

    You should go on my blog and comment on something, I would like that.

    From Deja

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  5. Unknown7 August 2015 at 11:21

    Hi Ariana
    I am a Student from Wesley Intermediate I like the story the your wrote. I like how you used full stop in your story keep it up and I cant wait to see more of your writing. Where you get the photo from? So I can write a story and you can read and give me a few tips :)

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  6. Unknown13 November 2015 at 10:21

    Hi Ariana, I am a student from Wesley Intermediate named Siutaisa and what I liked about your Writing is that you described the Little dinosaur. Maybe what I suggest you should do next time is that you should add some punctuation to make the reader make sense with what your talking about. Well done Ariana, good quality of work.

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  7. Unknown23 November 2015 at 09:58

    Hi Ariana, I really like your story and the way you describe the little dinosaur but it doesn't really make sense. Maybe next time you could get someone to proof read it to see if it makes sense. Great job!

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  8. Unknown23 November 2015 at 09:59

    Hi Ariana, I really like your story and the way you describe the little dinosaur but it doesn't really make sense. Maybe next time you could get someone to proof read it to see if it makes sense. Great job!

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  9. Anonymous22 March 2016 at 10:01

    Hi Ariana
    My name is Lucy I am a year 5 student at Papakura Central School.
    I really like you dinosaur story. Maybe next time you can describe the little dinosaur a bit more.
    Keep up the good work.

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  10. Anonymous28 July 2016 at 14:32

    I love your story ariana

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  11. Anonymous28 July 2016 at 14:32

    I love your story Ariana

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  12. Anonymous28 July 2016 at 14:33

    I love your story Ariana

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